National Geographic , Ashwag
Australia, by Bike(is it a thing or person ?) is an impressive story for me. He hit the road by his bicycle to find out more about his ne(S) adopted country. (H)how he narrates his everyday events, findings and experiance(S) through the end.
How about writing this sentence this way:
I found the everyday events and findings experienced by the narrator to be very intriguing ,till the end of the story.
At the sam(S) time to overcome his broken marrige(S).
(Not clear-incomplete sentence)
Ashwag, you have used 'he'-two times and 'his'- once, to describe the writer.It would be appropriate to use the author/narrator/writer/story teller.Variable usage of words creates a strong impression on the examiner-that you know the language.
Humbly,
Mubs
How about writing this sentence this way:
I found the everyday events and findings experienced by the narrator to be very intriguing ,till the end of the story.
At the sam(S) time to overcome his broken marrige(S).
(Not clear-incomplete sentence)
Ashwag, you have used 'he'-two times and 'his'- once, to describe the writer.It would be appropriate to use the author/narrator/writer/story teller.Variable usage of words creates a strong impression on the examiner-that you know the language.
Humbly,
Mubs
posted by Anonymous at
6:28 PM
1 Comments:
Thanks Mubs!
I'll be able to edit/comment, using the error correction code mainly, over the weekend.
This exercise was to get over the class' nervousness regarding posting on the blog.
While there are no Yasmeens or Mubarkas in this group, the general standard is higher than with i-magic and i-words.
So we're getting there.
How about a Thursday test session in the Learning Zone? I'm sure I-match are up for it, aren't you guys?
LEARNING Zone is open all day THURSDAY from 08.00am to 08.00pm. The young learners are messing around in the morning, so from 12.00 midday it should be quieter. Whaddya think?
Rock on bloggers!
Tony
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Tony Beale, at 10:17 AM
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